The Day Out


I wrote this poem on a train journey to a family day out. As sometimes happens my anxieties for the day and how the boys might cope had caused my husband and I to fall out. I was really angry when I wrote the main body of the poem and I think it shows what I know to well. I write best when I write straight from the heart, from the raw emotion. The day turned out much better than I anticipated and I know Mr H will have apologised for a situation which was not all his fault, but he’s good like that.

The Day Out

It’s early still but I feel fully drained,
The morning of anxieties and stress has ordained,
That I don’t want to be here sharing this view,
Of the world passing by, as the train rushes through,
Fields and hills, hamlets and folds,
Turning to houses, building, shops, roads.
Across the aisle the antagonist sits,
Sharing a game with one of our kids.
Still pushing my button, still harming with blame,
Still hell bent on creating a day,
Where a family of four are divided to two,
Sides are taken the minors must choose.
A blackened eye glance, a surly exchange,
The gulf between widens constructed with pain.
The day before seems endless, hopeless beyond,
Happiness, hope for a memory of fond,
Moments and smiles, pictures to put,
For future review in a memory book.
Some five hours pass and homeward we bound,
Contented with the family time we have found.
All previous anger so quickly diffused,
By a husbands confession of I really love you.

I have linked this to the wonderful #Prose4T

Prose for Thought


  1. Stix March 14, 2013 / 9:16 pm

    Beautiful Sarah x

  2. Verily Victoria Vocalises March 14, 2013 / 9:34 pm

    Sarah, this gave me goose bumps when I read this – it really does show that you can have an argument and then still make up, without it always being you who has to apologise! Love it, so well written. As we said on Twitter earlier, raw emotion is the best way to write poetry. Thank you so much for linking up again xx

    • thepuffindiaries March 14, 2013 / 9:37 pm

      I was really angry when I wrote it, just wanted to go home. My husbands sense prevailed thankfully. x

  3. bavariansojourn March 15, 2013 / 9:30 am

    I do wish you would stop messing my eyemake-up up! You are an incredibly talented writer…

    • thepuffindiaries March 15, 2013 / 9:34 am

      I just need to be angry or upset all the time to get the best out of me, which is a shame. x

  4. Jaime Oliver March 15, 2013 / 3:20 pm

    Sarah you are so clever, this a beautiful piece! xx

  5. Helen Braid March 15, 2013 / 6:45 pm

    That is lovely Sarah – it so obviously worked writing it at the time, while you were still feeling that emotion. Glad though that it passed and you ended up enjoying the day xx

    • thepuffindiaries March 15, 2013 / 10:46 pm

      Thanks Helen, I fortunately had a notebook in my handbag so sat a scribbled away. It’s a good way of releasing it all too. xx

  6. new mummy March 16, 2013 / 9:03 am

    raw and honest and once again, love wins. brilliant.

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